tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8126207.post3929980483531273281..comments2023-12-29T20:49:43.018-07:00Comments on masago-no-haiku: Renhai Reflections 100: Commuting TimeMasagohttp://www.blogger.com/profile/12739811491183011023noreply@blogger.comBlogger14125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8126207.post-58099445371645293482009-04-25T21:46:00.000-06:002009-04-25T21:46:00.000-06:00Thank you all for your kind and encouraging commen...Thank you all for your kind and encouraging comments.Masagohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12739811491183011023noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8126207.post-14069477222164762542009-04-24T20:32:00.000-06:002009-04-24T20:32:00.000-06:00Hi,
Just checked back here and what nice things ...Hi, <br /><br />Just checked back here and what nice things , what nice poeple you all are ! Best Wishes, KarinaKarinahttp://www.poetrywriting.orgnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8126207.post-87381716510338048692009-04-24T10:59:00.000-06:002009-04-24T10:59:00.000-06:00I can hear the watch swinging. Great verse!
Best ...I can hear the watch swinging. Great verse!<br /><br />Best wishes<br />RalfRalf Brökerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08602494065251750620noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8126207.post-33109035645825800992009-04-23T17:56:00.000-06:002009-04-23T17:56:00.000-06:00in my head - somewhere from a childhood memory - ...in my head - somewhere from a childhood memory - is someone with a swinging pocket watch. makes me want to ask my older brothers if dad carried one.Pamelahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05404943895800549273noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8126207.post-4151915440218999632009-04-23T06:15:00.000-06:002009-04-23T06:15:00.000-06:00You're a lucky one,
if you travel to the stars,
an...You're a lucky one,<br />if you travel to the stars,<br />and you miss a train!:)Boruthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12246759255373091821noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8126207.post-74429754914273582492009-04-22T21:15:00.000-06:002009-04-22T21:15:00.000-06:00I really like this one too. That last verse is ver...I really like this one too. That last verse is very special. The whole renhai is like one beautiful poem. Excellent work Karina and Vaughn.Janice Thomsonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02506920585319893814noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8126207.post-66027494318062232572009-04-22T10:10:00.000-06:002009-04-22T10:10:00.000-06:00great job, masago and karina.
the haiku could each...great job, masago and karina.<br />the haiku could each stand alone but together they make a delightful renhai - one of my favourites, i thinkpolonahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12631341810150848122noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8126207.post-27002836821073649242009-04-22T08:38:00.000-06:002009-04-22T08:38:00.000-06:00Hi, thanks , Vaughn sent me this link. This is a w...Hi, thanks , Vaughn sent me this link. This is a whole poem that all works together , I am not sure what the order numbers mean..but each one works together...like the thousand stars ...with the ewes and sheep dotting the landscape, The swinging of the watch fob between day and night...the arms of the windmill the hands of the watch ...Yes the last verse is an extremely poetic verse, not only letting you know what time it is ..now fully dark ...a thousand stars...seemngly to arrive ...at the moment of departure. There are many meanings for this short renhai. The "ewes and lambs " at Cambridge Univeristy of which that breed of lamb was name after. contrasting the the "old windmills" or "fixtures", such as professors with the young grazing there now. I particularly find that this is one of my favorites we have written. <br /><br />Thanks again for all the nice comments. KarinaKarinahttp://www.poetrywriting.orgnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8126207.post-19025643397093653662009-04-22T05:28:00.000-06:002009-04-22T05:28:00.000-06:00nice one, plenty of motion; i can see sketches of ...nice one, plenty of motion; i can see sketches of the scenery as the train goes by<br /><I>much love<br />gillena</I>Gillena Coxhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09191865405561549074noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8126207.post-76235513795987250952009-04-22T05:09:00.000-06:002009-04-22T05:09:00.000-06:00Theres an old world charm to some of these, the po...Theres an old world charm to some of these, the pocket watch, the windmill. I love the last one especially - a real wow when reading.jemhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08181038873568527264noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8126207.post-83159222693153542542009-04-22T03:21:00.000-06:002009-04-22T03:21:00.000-06:00excellent you two
johnexcellent you two<br />johnJohn McDonaldhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02306609410526737715noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8126207.post-8987004214267140772009-04-21T22:03:00.000-06:002009-04-21T22:03:00.000-06:00yes, this is nice.yes, this is nice.J. Andrew Lockharthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12567156257114496618noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8126207.post-41416124815637088742009-04-21T20:51:00.000-06:002009-04-21T20:51:00.000-06:00very good. I like this onevery good. I like this oneEmma Dallowayhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02762502184477362139noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8126207.post-9545195604535359682009-04-21T20:37:00.000-06:002009-04-21T20:37:00.000-06:00Some great imageries in these, Masago and Karina :...Some great imageries in these, Masago and Karina :)<br /><br />my order of liking is 2, 3, 1 :)<br /><br />and interesting note on the second one :)<br /><br />wishes, <br />devikaDevika Jyothihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02349153846127145464noreply@blogger.com