2007-09-18

Rengay Through the Seasons #3 [1-3]

by Masago: Rengay 3, Verses 1-3 (of 6)

Little beggar... squirreling away pine cones / in our roof.
A layer of dark moss, on each cedar shake.
Yellowing larch — the wind shakes more needles / onto the ground.

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9 comments:

  1. Unique Designs from Zazzle10:07 PM, September 18, 2007

    very artfully done

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  2. Pamela10:09 PM, September 18, 2007

    can't wait for tomorrow

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  3. J. Andrew Lockhart11:34 PM, September 18, 2007

    This one is dark.

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  4. Borut12:37 AM, September 19, 2007

    Life..., receding...

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  5. floots12:59 AM, September 19, 2007

    ah mortality
    dark as andrew said
    well done

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  6. John McDonald1:56 AM, September 19, 2007

    enjoying
    john

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  7. Anonymous10:31 AM, September 19, 2007

    Definitely enjoying.

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  8. polona11:03 AM, September 19, 2007

    yes, dark... but beautifully done.

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  9. Masago7:03 PM, September 19, 2007

    Thank you everyone.

    You are right about this verse being dark. That wasn't my intention. I have therefore changed the first line from "Dying tree" to "Yellowing larch". This is more in line with the feel of the entire poem as well as supporting the Autumn season (larch needles turn yellow and fall in the autumn, leaving the trees leafless through the winter).

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