by Masago: Rengay #20 (Jan 13-19, 2008), Verses 1-6 (of 5)
Snowflakes / on a branch... it dips / a bit more.
Family dinner — garlic salt / on a stick of celery.
Athletic club — another gulp before / pressing thirty.
Siphoned gas — on the way back the can / grows heavier.
Sudden blizzard... we taxi / back down the runway.
Bowheads enter / an arctic bay... plumes spray / from blowholes.
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i'll be interested to read your notes on this one
ReplyDeletefor me it is "pause and effect" - an action (often a natural one) and its reaction making me/the world stop and think
it's ok - i'll shut up now :)
thank you
enjoyed this one
ReplyDeletejohn
I see a certain 'heaviness' linking each segment. But who am I?
ReplyDeleteI can hear you thinking 'Nobody' from here Masago! LOL.
that's a beautiful and rare image to round things up
ReplyDeleteUnfortunately, but fortunately, it's rare I can see the limbs dipping from the snow. I prefer garlic salt on radishes, I avoid AC's (not good for my perfectly round figure),there is nothing that chases well with siphoned gas,I would love to see the bowheads. Well done!!
ReplyDeleteFloots: It is always interesting and revealing to learn how others interpret these short verses. Pause and Effect is indeed a very interesting take on this one. The theme I intended in this rengay is a bit concealed and has the added twist of the reflection/scent link types thrown in. This may have caused readers to scratch their heads a little. Thank you. :-)
ReplyDeleteJohn: Thanks.
Richard: Well done! You ain't heavy (and thus 'nothing'), you're my brother. :-)
Polona: Thank you!
Pat: Nicely summarized. Thank you. P.S. we wouldn't want to disturb that perfect figure. :-)