by Masago: Rengay #23 (Feb 3-9, 2008), Verses 1-4 (of 6)
The crack of ice / over the sound of a trickle — frozen waterfall.
Behind the curtain, motionless — the boy's turn to go on stage.
Ice fishing / all day long — my lunch, the only bite.
Her friend holds / the half-spud... the needle's tip / sinks through.
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Good progression.
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A fisherman that tells the truth, that's amazing!!
ReplyDeleteinteresting... can't figure it out yet :)
ReplyDeleteAurora: Thanks.
ReplyDeleteJohn: Thank you.
Pat: Ha, ha... good point!
Polona: :-)