by Zhanna P. Rader (zh.r), and Vaughn Seward (vs);
Rengay #48 (Jul 27 - Aug 2, 2008) Summary
Tender Moments
The fisherman's shirt —
she breathes in its sea smell,
this summer night. /zh.r
He touches her negligee —
tender moments together. /vs
A nun walks by him,
with downcast eyes, trembling —
white lily, pink-edged. /zh.r
Roomful of people —
he, without even trying,
keeps noticing her. /vs
Alone with a nude model —
the young artist wipes her brow. /zh.r
Early beach morning —
he applies suntan lotion
on her sculpted form. /vs
The central theme in this rengay is, of course, "Romance". There is also an alternating pattern of Him / Her throughout each of the verses. In verse 5 there is an intentional ambiguity in that a young male artist could be wiping the female model's brow or it could be that it is a female artist wiping her own brow (and the model is a male).
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13 comments:
Romance was brought out perfectly! The two of you did a wonderful job.
Good one! Came here from Andrew's page. Liked your blog...
yes very good
john
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Bye!
again, excellent work from both of you
Zhanna and I thank you all for your warm comments and support.
Sreejith: Thank you for visiting and commenting.
you have wonderful poetic ideas, Zhanna and Vaughn! i liked it very much to read these verses!
The beauty of a nude figure, ultimately clothed in formal perfection (5-7-5)!?:)
Borut: You noticed. Thanks!
are you kidding? I was wiping my brow
Pamela: :-)
[Apologies for absence, computer lost all my favourites. Great to catch up with what I've missed!]
This sequence turned out so well. Romance, sexual tension, intimacy, love. Its all there. Very well done to both of you.
JEM: Thanks so much (on behalf of Zhanna and me).
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