2009-01-27

Renhai Reflections 71: Relaxed Embrace


Relaxed Embrace
A Renhai by Janice Thomson (jt) & Vaughn Seward (vs)

Hemlock branch —
a chunk of frost flowers
still attached. /vs;jt

Cattails at the pond's edge — /vs
a moat surrounds each stem. /jt

A warm breeze
slowly melts the ice —
a leaf springs free. /vs;jt

Click here for notes and linking details:
http://cflat7.drivehq.com/Renhai_0117.htm

[With this post we offer a little more spring hope. The Renhai is also unique in a certain way. Check the notes for more information about this and about "frost flowers".]

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10 comments:

  1. Pamela9:59 PM, January 27, 2009

    another one that gives me a memory dip

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  2. polona3:40 PM, January 28, 2009

    ah, lovely... and it gives some hope of spring...

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  3. Margie5:26 PM, January 28, 2009

    Very well done!
    I enjoyed it!

    Margie

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  4. Devika Jyothi7:36 PM, January 28, 2009

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  5. Devika Jyothi7:37 PM, January 28, 2009

    I have a doubt -- when in partnership Renhai

    You discuss everything --every word that would go in a poem -- and then each one put them in different lines in their hand...

    or one writes a line and leave it to the other to fill up??

    This is not a mockery of the situation. Its my real doubt...Because, Masago, you once suggested me writing a Renhai with you :)

    And I found the piece a bit too disjointed except when seen individually

    wishes,
    devika

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  6. Masago9:51 PM, January 28, 2009

    Thanks all!

    Devika, remember that Eastern linked verse is not like Western verse. Each stanza is an image, a word picture and is more or less independent except for the theme and linkages. If one expects to see a story unfold they will be disappointed. Renhai, rengay, rengay, and renku are all about variety and the linking not the narrative (although we have experiment with more narrative renhai).

    As for writing them, normally each person writes a line of the middle verse and then one writes verse 1 and the other writes verse 3. We discuss each other's contributions as the poem is developed each step of the way. Please read the links at the end of this overview for more info:

    http://groups.yahoo.com/group/renhai/

    I.e.:

    A more detailed introduction:
    http://groups.yahoo.com/group/renhai/message/938

    A step-by-step tutorial:
    http://tinyurl.com/3b

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  7. Devika Jyothi10:07 PM, January 28, 2009

    Thanks Masago, for the kind response :)

    I need to see the links, will do it..

    thanks again,
    devika

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  8. John McDonald4:38 AM, January 29, 2009

    great stuff
    john

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  9. Pat Paulk8:39 AM, January 30, 2009

    To the little leaf that could:Cheers!

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  10. Janice Thomson11:51 AM, January 30, 2009

    My thanks to everyone too!

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