by Masago: Rengay 2, Verses 1-6 (of 6) Summary
Faint Thump
The faint thump / of a distant basketball — autumn evening.
Canola field horizon — a glint of setting sun.
That area / in Grandma's back yard — hint of mint.
A new bill / in change... the slight feel / of "Twenty Dollars".
In line to buy corn — I can almost taste it.
He knew before / the ball was even snapped — long bomb.
The first verse of this rengay was based on hearing a neighbour kid get in a few last moments of an autumn day. And an experience of summer that was soon going to end with the coming of winter.
The central theme is the notion of something barely perceptible. A second theme of senses came to me after writing the second verse. There are five senses and yet there are 6 verses in rengay. The idea of using the 6th sense, intuition, as the last sense in the series was suddenly obvious.
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8 comments:
This is getting more and more interesting.
i agree
enjoyed the "talk-through" as well
thanks vaughn
I agree with Andrew and Floots!:)
Definitely more interesting. Enjoying this series immensely, Vaughn.
Thank you everyone for your support and warm comments.
obviously a very creative thinker.
This one really works, Vaughn.
Bill, Pamela: Thanks for your warm comments.
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