2008-12-07
Renhai Reflections 53: Winter Romance
Winter Romance
A Renhai by Janice Thomson (jt) & Vaughn Seward (vs)
On the frigid lake
pushing a homemade iceboat
his eyes meet mine. /jt
Down the hill on cardboard, /vs
her foot entangles his. /jt
I meet the girl
from class while skating at
the frozen creek. /vs
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[This is a spin-off of Renhai 100, see the notes for more information.]
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11 comments:
Uh uh..Janice and Masago join for a romantic series..:)
a bit too cold...
But then the mood takes it off...
Nice series there...
wishes,
devika
good one
john
A winter class...ic!:)
"I meet the girl" makes me a teen-ager again. Maybe this time I'll get a date.
i really like how you tweaked it into something fresh :)
Any place to meet girls is OK with me!!
playing tootsie in the 2nd verse?
Met the girl after class, M and J?
To me, she seem like looking to learn skating :))
came for a new one..will come later, Masago..
wishes,
devika
ps: Hope you don't mind me kidding :)
These are so tender, they make me yearn to fall in love. Thank you both.
Great to see these two side by side. To see how the bare bones remain but the atmosphere can totally change. Thanks for sharing the workings with us.
I enjoyed it very much to read "Winter Romance" -- the cold and ... so nice this contrast!
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