2009-03-24

Renhai Reflections 91: A Share of the Tree


A Share of the Tree

A Renhai by Zhanna P. Rader (zh.r) & Vaughn Seward (vs)

Chewing... chewing
with millions of others
in a green maple. /zh.r

A branch, near the top — /vs
this leaf, now just lace. /zh.r

A Baltimore oriole
warbles a song close by —
I crawl under. /vs

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11 comments:

Janice Thomson said...

The first verse really sets the tone for this presenting a sharp image with the last verse adding a subtle touch of humor. Love this one. Well done you two!

Devika Jyothi said...

interesting set, Masago and Zhanna

I liked all -- had to look for oriole :)

wishes,
devika

John McDonald said...

delightful images
john

Emma Dalloway said...

yes, as John said, delightful images

polona said...

i really like this, and the versatility you show over again

jem said...

This line is beautiful - 'this leaf, now just lace' - I'll try to remember that next time those pests chew something I've planted.

Pamela said...

a little fiber for chewin' on. (:

J. Andrew Lockhart said...

I'm with Janice- the 1st line does it.

Borut said...

KIdding:North American Dead Tree Scrolls!?:)

Ralf Bröker said...

This is what they didn't tell us in "The very hungry caterpillar": Life is always perilous, too. I like it!

Best wishes
Ralf

Masago said...

Thank you all for you kind and amusing comments!