2010-03-01

Renhai Reflections 174: The Thin Line


The Thin Line

A Renhai by Vaughn Seward (vs) & John Daleiden (jd)

At the school
a child raises a flag —
the sound of singing. /jd

Two standing soldiers /vs
a broken rose blossom. /jd

Sugar plum fairy
dancing — her music box
winds down. /vs

Click here for notes and linking details:
http://cflat7.drivehq.com/Renhai_0217.htm

[This is the second dual language Renhai (English/Esperanto) that John and I did together.]

5 comments:

RBroeker said...

Not too easy to see beyond the scene. Probably I shouldn't do it? An innocent child and the soldier, the kids' song and the music box, the flag and the rose, the singing and the dancing - enmershed was the word I had to look up the renhai before. Here it is clearly see without explaining comments. Great teamwork!

Best wishes
Ralf

Gillena Cox said...

excellent title as well
much love
gillena

John McDonald said...

love it
john

Masago said...

Thanks all!

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