2010-07-11

Renhai Reflections 188: Making the Grade


Making the Grade

A Renhai by Vaughn Seward (Solo)

A puff of smoke
occasionally wafts past
the open window.

Steam railway excursion —
a fly on the wooden seat.

Late afternoon —
the shadow of the cars dance
on the passing field.

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7 comments:

Devika Jyothi said...

crack of dawn
the world, still a
silhoutte

Just felt like adding to the solo Renhai, Masago...hope thats okay :)

wishes,
devika

John McDonald said...

well caught Vaughn a journey I've made many times
john

Pamela said...

I would like to take that journey.
(except for Devika's crack of dawn. I'll snuggle my pillow, thank you.)

Gillena Cox said...

Love all the movement; even the fly will eventually fly off if he wants to continue living

much love
gillena

Janice Thomson said...

Love the idea of the fly taking the journey too...much enjoyed Vaughn.

Masago said...

Thank you all very much!

Devika, know the feeling, thanks.

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