2008-05-03

Rengay Through the Seasons #35 Summary

by John McDonald (jd), and Vaughn Seward (vs);
Rengay #35 (Apr 27 - May 3, 2008) Summary


The Rookie

First day out
learning to be a rabbit —
tree-bark scattered. /jm

New postal job — he opens
a gate with "Beware of Dog". /vs

The young mother
gives the infant her breast —
the crying stops. /jm

Erupting curses —
the rookie mason nearly
hits his chisel. /vs

Another wrong note —
she bangs the keyboard. /jm

He discovers how
to get under her skin:
on, off... louder... /vs

The central theme in this rengay is "New Learners". In the first verse we have a baby rabbit's first day out. The image here is of the baby rabbit nibbling on the bark of a tree creating bits of tree bark scattering it around the tree.

Interestingly, Vaughn wrote verse four and only later discovered that John is a retired stone mason!


In the last verse we had the idea that it was a young sibling that was doing the annoying, but it is possible that one could see others in this role.


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10 comments:

J. Andrew Lockhart said...

Wonderful work bu the two of you! :)

Borut said...

As an apprentice haijin in many ways, I feel almost at home in this one!:) As to John, I knew he is a retired stone mason… A freemason of sorts …!?:)

jem said...

There feels like real wisdom in these. They are like philosophical teachings, that say that whenever we start something new there will be pitfalls and bumps and bruises but they are all part of the learning.

haiku-shelf said...

well done!

we are all beginners, every day in our life!...that´s what we share...


oh, this second verse!...when i finished university i needed a job for some months and worked for an assurance company, i had to visit the clients at home and...all these signs "Beware of..", i hated these signs...

polona said...

kudos to you both!

Masago said...

On behalf of John and I, thank you for your kind comments and support!

Andrew: Thanks.

Borut: :-) Free indeed.

Jem: Thank you for the extra insight. I have had my share of learning's bumps and bruises.

Haiku-shelf: Many thanks! You obviously survived; hopefully those experiences weren't too painful. :-)

Polona: Thank you!

John McDonald said...

back from hols. I want to echo Vaughn's sentiments to you all
john

Bill said...

Good work, guys!

Masago said...

Bill: thanks so much (on behalf of John & myself)!

Pamela said...

AWww! Now that you explain it - of course.

(My computer has finally died - and I am at the mercy of using someone elses.)