2008-08-02

Rengay Through the Seasons #48 Summary

by Zhanna P. Rader (zh.r), and Vaughn Seward (vs);
Rengay #48 (Jul 27 - Aug 2, 2008) Summary


Tender Moments

The fisherman's shirt —
she breathes in its sea smell,
this summer night. /zh.r

He touches her negligee —
tender moments together. /vs

A nun walks by him,
with downcast eyes, trembling —
white lily, pink-edged. /zh.r

Roomful of people —
he, without even trying,
keeps noticing her. /vs

Alone with a nude model —
the young artist wipes her brow. /zh.r

Early beach morning —
he applies suntan lotion
on her sculpted form. /vs

The central theme in this rengay is, of course, "Romance". There is also an alternating pattern of Him / Her throughout each of the verses. In verse 5 there is an intentional ambiguity in that a young male artist could be wiping the female model's brow or it could be that it is a female artist wiping her own brow (and the model is a male).

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13 comments:

J. Andrew Lockhart said...

Romance was brought out perfectly! The two of you did a wonderful job.

Sreejith Kumar said...

Good one! Came here from Andrew's page. Liked your blog...

John McDonald said...

yes very good
john

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polona said...

again, excellent work from both of you

Masago said...

Zhanna and I thank you all for your warm comments and support.

Sreejith: Thank you for visiting and commenting.

haiku-shelf said...

you have wonderful poetic ideas, Zhanna and Vaughn! i liked it very much to read these verses!

Borut said...

The beauty of a nude figure, ultimately clothed in formal perfection (5-7-5)!?:)

Masago said...

Borut: You noticed. Thanks!

Pamela said...

are you kidding? I was wiping my brow

Masago said...

Pamela: :-)

jem said...

[Apologies for absence, computer lost all my favourites. Great to catch up with what I've missed!]

This sequence turned out so well. Romance, sexual tension, intimacy, love. Its all there. Very well done to both of you.

Masago said...

JEM: Thanks so much (on behalf of Zhanna and me).