2009-09-20

Renhai Reflections 138: Awesome


Awesome

A Renhai by Gillena Cox (gc) & Vaughn Seward (vs)

Riverside
the marvel of mountains
and oceans. /gc

At the baptismal font /gc
a wee hand takes a scoop. /vs

Reaching higher
she almost touches
the Big Dipper. /vs

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8 comments:

John McDonald said...

excellent
john

Janice Thomson said...

Awesome indeed - love this. Excellent work Gillena and Vaughn.

Kristin Riggs said...

This might be my favorite set of yours that I have read! Wonderful!!! I LOVE the big dipper...I've always been fascinated by it. Here's one I wrote about it back in July-

seven stars
pour thoughts of you into
my evening daydreams...

J. Andrew Lockhart said...

I love the ending. :)

RBroeker said...

I was very touched, when I read this - and then I came to the last line. In my head there is only the German word for Big Dipper: der Große Wagen. So my first idea was, that she is standing in front of a rollercoaster. Of course the touching feeling was gone then, but looking at the stars oder waiting in a leisure park: I do like this renhai a lot.

Best wishes
Ralf

Masago said...

Thank you all very much!

Paula said...

Tre bele!

Very beautiful!

真秀 said...

Ah Yes,

This one was awesome. I have to agree with those who have posted before me. The ending is great. I think somehow, everyone in the Northern Hemisphere appreciates the power intrigue of the Big dipper. Great imagery. Fantastic poem.

Matthew