2009-03-08

Renhai Reflections 85: Keep Out


Keep Out

A Renhai by Karina Klesko (kk) & Vaughn Seward (vs)

Crosswalk traffic —
three Hail Mary's on the way
to the other side. /kk

A tree's branches all bare — /vs
paint peels off the 'Keep Out' sign. /kk

No Smoking —
the "No" crossed out with
a felt marker. /vs

Click here for notes and linking details:
http://cflat7.drivehq.com/Renhai_0008.htm

[...another one from about a year ago. This one was written with Karina Klesko, one of the co-editors of Sketchbook.]

9 comments:

Devika said...

Scenes from daily life, Masago..

The first one made me smile and then laugh! :)

2nd and 3rd --

Signs on the road -- who cares about it....the keeper forgets about it first, the public seldom looks at it!! :)

wishes,
devika

Borut said...

The YES/NO crossroads of our minds!?:)

John McDonald said...

well done
john

polona said...

ha, i like it

J. Andrew Lockhart said...

this one made me laugh! thanks :)

Masago said...

Thank you all!

Janice Thomson said...

This is good - love the images in all of them.

jem said...

I like these - I love spotting signs and the changes that happen to there, with weather, wear or interference. And I love Karina's first one - I almost hear it light a song lyric in my head, it has great rhythm.

karina said...

Hi, Vaughn sent me this link and it is nice to see the feedback .

Since the middle verse in a rehhai is established first, then the haiku , the first verse was fun becasue of the double meaning of ' other side' ......It was fun working with Vaughn and learning how to compose renhai, this may have been my first one. :)

All the Best, Karina