2009-07-12

Renhai Reflections 123: Grains


Grains

A Renhai by John W. Sexton (jws) & Vaughn Seward (vs)

The sun rises
over the red planet
as Phobos sets. /vs

Ghost-river in its arid bed — /jws
the landbooster skims near. /vs

The shell cities
now grains of sand, rotted empires
simply methane. /jws

Click here for notes and linking details:
http://cflat7.drivehq.com/Renhai_0163.htm

[This was written with John W. Sexton from Ireland, and was just published in the June, 2009 issue of the Lynx Journal for Linking Poets.]

7 comments:

RBroeker said...

Very nice idea: NASA meets SF - and becomes a dusty peace of somehow Wild-West-poetry. I like it a lot.

Best wishes
Ralf

Devika said...

I was about to say something seriously, but Ralf's comment made me laugh, Masago and John :)

i thought this was one of the best dark poetry series I read here...i don't think I have read many, though :)

ghost river -- Indian rivers mostly are those at the moment...as if the bed screams out..'there was a river here once' -- but, they fill with two good rains :)

wishes,
devika

Devika said...

Ralf that was "dusty piece" you meant, i guess :)

J. Andrew Lockhart said...

powerful!

John McDonald said...

good one again
john

Gillena Cox said...

The nice thing about the animations and cartoons for kids is that the good guys and the bad guys are clearly defined.
I foundd myself aligning withethe sun rising; the good guy; not so much out of choice but by structure; in being the first Verse i read and knew and can identify all the motifs; didn't know who Phobus was until i read the Notes, This is really an interesting renhai, after reading the notes i reread the renhai;
really nice

Masago said...

Thank you all so much!