2009-10-11

Renhai Reflections 142: Settling Down


Settling Down

A Renhai by Vaughn Seward (vs) & Janice Seward (js)

Quiet playground —
an autumn breeze upon
the set of swings. /js

Between bicycle spokes, /vs
a scarlet maple leaf. /js

Caught in traffic —
switching stations to look
for better news. /vs

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http://cflat7.drivehq.com/Renhai_0181.htm

[This Renhai was the first written with my wife Janice.]

8 comments:

Devika said...

games, sports and news...seems like back to pavilion for me! :)

enjoyed Masago and Janice :)

wishes,
devika

Kristin Riggs said...

You and your wife are a brilliant team, Vaughn. :) Loved this entire set!!!

Anonymous said...

Vaughn, I wonder why my comments do not go through. My password is rejected each time. Perhaps, I forgot both my username and my password. :( It looks like I can post only as an anonymous. My Facebook is acting even worse. It simply froze. As I said at your renhai forum, I enjoyed your renhai written with your wife. I especially enjoyed the first and the second verses.

I shall be gone for a short trip to Alabama for a literarty conference. Zhanna

John McDonald said...

and most enjoyable it is
john

RBroeker said...

The last two lines are a mirror of our times. We blame the messenger ...

What I really do like in this renhai is the sound of it. The s in line 2/3 (as a pair), 4/5, and 7/8 desribe the noise of tv or radio, when nothing is broadcasted.

Good one!

Best wishes
Ralf

J. Andrew Lockhart said...

very nice! fits so well together. :)

Masago said...

Thank you all!

Ralf, I hadn't noticed the sounds you have pointed out. Thanks!

Gillena Cox said...

absolutely love Verse 2

much love
gillena