2009-10-11
Renhai Reflections 142: Settling Down
Settling Down
A Renhai by Vaughn Seward (vs) & Janice Seward (js)
Quiet playground —
an autumn breeze upon
the set of swings. /js
Between bicycle spokes, /vs
a scarlet maple leaf. /js
Caught in traffic —
switching stations to look
for better news. /vs
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[This Renhai was the first written with my wife Janice.]
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9 comments:
games, sports and news...seems like back to pavilion for me! :)
enjoyed Masago and Janice :)
wishes,
devika
You and your wife are a brilliant team, Vaughn. :) Loved this entire set!!!
Vaughn, I wonder why my comments do not go through. My password is rejected each time. Perhaps, I forgot both my username and my password. :( It looks like I can post only as an anonymous. My Facebook is acting even worse. It simply froze. As I said at your renhai forum, I enjoyed your renhai written with your wife. I especially enjoyed the first and the second verses.
I shall be gone for a short trip to Alabama for a literarty conference. Zhanna
and most enjoyable it is
john
The last two lines are a mirror of our times. We blame the messenger ...
What I really do like in this renhai is the sound of it. The s in line 2/3 (as a pair), 4/5, and 7/8 desribe the noise of tv or radio, when nothing is broadcasted.
Good one!
Best wishes
Ralf
very nice! fits so well together. :)
Thank you all!
Ralf, I hadn't noticed the sounds you have pointed out. Thanks!
absolutely love Verse 2
much love
gillena
Nice information, many thanks to the author. It is incomprehensible to me now, but in general, the usefulness and significance is overwhelming. Thanks again and good luck!!!
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