2010-02-07

Renhai Reflections 167: A Renhai, Step by Step: Completed Middle


A Renhai, Step by Step: Completed Middle

by Vaughn Seward (Solo)

The link to the third verse could be one of many possibilities. I am struck by the first word, "howling" in "Howling north wind", and immediately I see the image of wolves baying at the moon:

A snow storm's
layer of white velvet —
creek bed.

A small break in the clouds —
wolves bay at a full moon.

Howling north wind —
I snuggle a bit deeper
under the sheets.

With the wolves baying at the moon, which by implication is appearing through the break in the clouds, there is as sense of being underneath, below... a kind of sheltering, a feeling which appears in each verse. This is therefore a secondary theme.

Next, and finally, a title...

4 comments:

Devika said...

very interesting -- how wolves and moon fitted in :))

seriously, it was a good experience, Masago :)

wishes,
devika

Bill said...

Beautifully done, and a clear exposition of the process. Is the title obligatory?

Masago said...

Thanks all!

Bill, a title is not absolutely obligatory but it is usually added by tradition.

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