bayou swamp...
all around our boat,
thick with swans
About Masago
- Masago
- Edmonton, Alberta, Canada
- From "The Haiku Anthology" I became interested in Haiku and I have since written numerous haiku, senyru, and tanka. "Masago", my haiku pen-name, means "grain(s) of sand" in Japanese. I have recently started learning Esperanto and Japanese. A few years ago I developed a new eastern verse form which we now call 'Renhai'.
My Blog List
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Ice Can Look Nice4 years ago
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A Dream, A Prayer8 years ago
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6 Hantu yang Muncul di Toilet11 years ago
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distant thunder12 years ago
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welcome spring14 years ago
7 comments:
Okay, you guys win...the before:
bayou swamp...
all around our boat
it's thick with swans
The after:
bayou swamp...
all around our boat
thick with swans
yea, i like it this way. it reminds me of a scene from The Notebook by Nicholas Sparks
Bingo! Give that girl a cigar! You are 100% right. I wrote this haiku from some memory that came to me not too long ago. And now that you mention it, it was in fact inspired by a scene in The Notebook...a very good movie, by the way. Well done Baxter.
haha...i do my best :)
i like this one!
(haven't seen the previous version until i read the comments; works better as it is now)
"thick with swans"
I love the 3rd line!
Love the contrast between swamp and swans!
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