grey morning...
a whale on the beach lies
shrouded in fog
About Masago
- Masago
- Edmonton, Alberta, Canada
- From "The Haiku Anthology" I became interested in Haiku and I have since written numerous haiku, senyru, and tanka. "Masago", my haiku pen-name, means "grain(s) of sand" in Japanese. I have recently started learning Esperanto and Japanese. A few years ago I developed a new eastern verse form which we now call 'Renhai'.
My Blog List
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At the Café9 months ago
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I Can Almost Smell it1 year ago
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6 Hantu yang Muncul di Toilet10 years ago
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distant thunder12 years ago
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welcome spring14 years ago
3 comments:
The art of poetry As a metaphor, "shrouded in fog" has long since degenerated into cliche. But your literal use of it here fully restores its power, including its power as metaphor. Beautiful.
By the way, inspired by your example, I figured out the secret of adding links at my blog. You'll find yours there.
I read grey in all three lines. I like it!
There's great mystery and a profound sense of loss looming in this piece. I think you've tapped into an eternal image of the ever movement of the sea divested of its life force in the slow decay of this great rotting fish. It's a poignant reflection and one of your best.
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