2006-03-02

540. Grey Morning

grey morning...
a whale on the beach lies
shrouded in fog

3 comments:

Bill said...

The art of poetry As a metaphor, "shrouded in fog" has long since degenerated into cliche. But your literal use of it here fully restores its power, including its power as metaphor. Beautiful.

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Pat Paulk said...

I read grey in all three lines. I like it!

Nick Zegarac said...

There's great mystery and a profound sense of loss looming in this piece. I think you've tapped into an eternal image of the ever movement of the sea divested of its life force in the slow decay of this great rotting fish. It's a poignant reflection and one of your best.