Rengay Through the Seasons #23 Summary

by Masago: Rengay #23 (Feb 3-9, 2008) Summary

Behind the Curtain

The crack of ice
over the sound of a trickle —
frozen waterfall.

Behind the curtain, motionless —
the boy's turn to go on stage.

Ice fishing
all day long — my lunch,
the only bite.

Her friend holds
the half-spud... the needle's tip
sinks through.

A snowboarder plows under —
his partner offers his hand.

Tap-tap, tap-tap —
a woodpecker chips deeper
into the trunk.

The central theme in this rengay is "Out of Sight". Various things are out of sight in each verse: water, boy, fish, needle tip, snowboarder, Insects.

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J. Andrew Lockhart said...

"Out of Sight"
I wasn't thinking of that at all - not sure what I was thinking about anyway. :)

Borut said...

Including the woodpecker: loud but, out of sight?:)

floots said...

another fine series vaughn
thank you
especially liked the woodpecker
(it's what we're all doing) :)

polona said...

it becomes obvious when someone points it out :)
well done again

Pamela said...

okay.. I shuddered with the 1/2 spud.
ha ha.

this was very good. But that is what I have come to expect!

Masago said...

Andrew: :-)

Borut: In some cases, yes.

Floots: Thank you! Right, some days my neck is mighty sore. :-)

Polona: :-) Many thanks.

Pamela: I shudder with that one too. Yikes. Thank you.

Pat Paulk said...

Ditto Floots on the wood pecker. Being seeing some huge ones around here the last couple of weeks. Vaughn thank you for your encouraging words for my great-neice. She needs a little boost in her confidence in English class.

Masago said...

Pat: Thanks (it is pleasure to support your great-niece, I think her piece was very well done).

Bill said...

Each part of this is very strong (I love the first hokku), which makes the coherence of the whole all the more impressive.

Masago said...

Bill, thank you for your kind words.

jem said...

I'm new to your site Masago - and fairly new to rengay too. But I think I'll stick around as its captivating. I love the way you reveal your intentions, and cross reference everything so carefully. It feels like entertainment and instruction all rolled into one.

Masago said...

jem: Thank you for these kind words.