Blanket of velvet-gray fog — /zr
a crow pierces the silence. /vs
This middle verse not only portrays an image of nature but it also contains a number of potential themes and things that could be used for linking with other verses. I.e.:
- Flat, Blanket-like.
- Covering, Permeating.
- Velvety, Soft.
- Gray-coloured.
- Black-coloured, Dark.
- Fog, Mist, Rain, Steam, Cloud-like.
- Stillness, Silence.
- Crow, Bird, Animal.
- Cawing, Bird call.
- Piercing (sound), Interruption.
After some discussion, at this point Zhanna and I decided that we liked the idea of "Permeating" and decided to write the other verses to this theme. The other verses would therefore support this theme and also reference one or more of the above objects, actions, and descriptions in their linkages.
As Zhanna wrote the first line of this middle verse, it was her turn to write the next verse.
Next: Renhai Anatomy: The Third Verse
4 comments:
Do you always have to create a single strong theme or can you employ two or three themes as long as they link with the starting two lines?
beautiful! it's amazing how words can give emotion.
lovely interweaving
john
Janice: You can have more than one theme, however it can be challenging as a theme must be present in all three verses. We'll talk more about this tomorrow (Sep 9). Thanks.
Andrew: Thank you... I agree!
John: Thanks.
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