2008-09-17

Renhai Reflections 14: Impressed

Another Solo Renhai

Impressed
A Renhai by Vaughn Seward
August 25, 2007

Baking Tortillas —
one comes out just like
the map of Spain.

Impressed patch of underbrush,
the size of a bull moose.

A night's sleep —
she awakes with graffiti
on her cheek.

Theme: Impressions
Season: Summer/Autumn
Link 1 to 2: Flattened.
Link 2 to 3: Sleep.
Link 3 to 1: Outlined image.

This is another solo Renhai that was written at the end summer. In this case the middle verse was written at one sitting and not the line-at-a-time approach which is necessary with Renhai* written with a partner.

*As with Haiku, the plural of 'Renhai' is just 'Renhai'.

10 comments:

Nick Zegarac said...

Sublime reflections all and one, that the greatness of your verse continues to linger long after the eye has passed the written word. Very nice, indeed.

Borut said...

Haha! I'm simply impressed!:) Especially by the map of Spain!:)

kouji said...

true, true. me and my 'haikus.' :O d'oh! :O

Janice Thomson said...

Like your title I'm 'impressed' with these Renhai - each verse giving such a vivid and well known image.

J. Andrew Lockhart said...

I love the ending! :)

Masago said...

Nick: Thank you for your kind words.

Borut: :-)

Kouji: *smile*

Janice: Thank you so much.

Andrew: All's well that ends well(?).

haiku-shelf said...

i love this poetic idea:

"..Tortillas -/...like/the map of Spain"


best wishes,
Angelika

Masago said...

Angelika: Thank you.

jem said...

Great theme, well observed. Each part made me smile with recognition.

Masago said...

Jem: Thanks. :-)