Another Solo Renhai
Impressed
A Renhai by Vaughn Seward
August 25, 2007
Baking Tortillas —
one comes out just like
the map of Spain.
Impressed patch of underbrush,
the size of a bull moose.
A night's sleep —
she awakes with graffiti
on her cheek.
Theme: Impressions
Season: Summer/Autumn
Link 1 to 2: Flattened.
Link 2 to 3: Sleep.
Link 3 to 1: Outlined image.
This is another solo Renhai that was written at the end summer. In this case the middle verse was written at one sitting and not the line-at-a-time approach which is necessary with Renhai* written with a partner.
*As with Haiku, the plural of 'Renhai' is just 'Renhai'.
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10 comments:
Sublime reflections all and one, that the greatness of your verse continues to linger long after the eye has passed the written word. Very nice, indeed.
Haha! I'm simply impressed!:) Especially by the map of Spain!:)
true, true. me and my 'haikus.' :O d'oh! :O
Like your title I'm 'impressed' with these Renhai - each verse giving such a vivid and well known image.
I love the ending! :)
Nick: Thank you for your kind words.
Borut: :-)
Kouji: *smile*
Janice: Thank you so much.
Andrew: All's well that ends well(?).
i love this poetic idea:
"..Tortillas -/...like/the map of Spain"
best wishes,
Angelika
Angelika: Thank you.
Great theme, well observed. Each part made me smile with recognition.
Jem: Thanks. :-)
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