UnderstandingA Renhai by Vaughn Seward (vs) & Janice Thomson (jt)Tidy cupboards —
each fruit can on the shelf
facing outward.
/jtApple sauce on toast —
/vsthe kids avoid my eyes.
/jtFarmers market —
under stalls a boy looks for
other life forms.
/vsClick here for notes and linking details:http://cflat7.drivehq.com/Renhai_0145.htm
10 comments:
Interesting series, Masago and Janice :)
I liked the second one, most :)
wishes,
devika
Strange to me; there is said a lot between the lines, I think. The strict way you write together reminds me of asian paintings with coloured sands. Makes me feel a lot. Thank you.
Best wishes
Ralf
this is very good... well done the both of you!
well done
john
another delightful one :)
you two have a thing with these. nice!
the second verse is my favourite
much love
gillena
tidy cans, and spices alphabetized.
I know her/him.
I'm to busy looking for other forms of life .... sigh.
Thank you all!
I like this one - all those little quirky ways we have. The image of the cans is creepy and comforting at the same time. And I love that boy - I hope he finds something.
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