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2009-05-10
Renhai Reflections 104: Stringing Things
Stringing Things
A Renhai by John Daleiden (jd) & Vaughn Seward (vs)
In the Parlor
women stitch quilt blocks —
the twitter of birds. /jd
A piece of string in the beak — /vs
among tree buds, a new nest. /jd
Babbling brook —
for a fishing pole the boys
find a stick. /vs
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http://cflat7.drivehq.com/Renhai_0027.htm
[This is another one that was written with John Daleiden (US) a year ago. It is the second in a triad series in which the middle verse is common but the theme and the 1st and 3rd verses are different. When I wrote the "string in the beak" line to start the Renhai, John replied with several lines for me to pick from. I liked them all equally so we decided to form each one into its own Renhai.]
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7 comments:
Every piece signifies life and connections also work well, Masago and John :)
wishes,
devika
very good
john
yes, quite different from the first one, and yet... beautifully done
There is a engaging rhythmn in the last three lines. And strong o's and i's. I like that very much.
Best wishes
Ralf
This ties together very neatly. So many links. I like the way it made me picture the women stitching a nest.
Thank you all!
So many delightful scenes to enjoy - wonderful piece John and Vaughn.
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