another day ends
1 hour ago
2009-05-14
Renhai Reflections 106: Footfall
Footfall
A Renhai by Jerry McKenzie (jm) & Vaughn Seward (vs)
Asking directions —
as I depart, the ladies
resume their chatter. /vs
A lone dog shies away — /jm
a lap entices the cat. /vs
Footsteps in gravel —
the frogpond ribitting
suddenly stops. /vs
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Don't you think Masago ladies and their never ending chatter is fun...I love to watch them...
but I hate it when I do that in public...but sometimes one can't help for the circumstances which call for...
"Footsteps in gravel" -- a striking sound,
Good set, Jerry and Masago
the note was interesting
wishes,
devika
Masago, there's a contradiction when I said "I hate it" given that I talk too much in the comments section...
what I hate is 'certain' type of talks.:)
better to make clear :)
devika
Yes, "footsteps in gravel" is a great image. Unfortunately I don't know what "ribitting" is.
Best wishes
Ralf
Ah, the comings and goings of daily life.
I wish footsteps would hush the tree-frog in the backyard - he goes on and on and on but only in the wee hours of the morning - poor fella hasn't found a mate yet I guess :)
Good imagery Jerry and Vaughn.
Thanks all!
Devika: :-)
RBroeker: Ribitting is the sound made by frogs.
Janice: Sorry about your frog. :-)
we have a little croaker in our fish pond. If I step out onto the patio, he quits.
I guess he (she?) doesn't know how I come to attend the concert and mean no harm except to enjoy the song.
Very engaging. I might be inclined to say "the frogpond's ribitting," since it's the ribitting, and not the frogpond, that actually stops. (All those years of teaching composition have left their mark.)
I like this one in particular!:)
I love the way the first and last work together. As soon as I read about the ladies chatter I thought of water parting to let someone pass. And then we're in the water at the end with those frogs. Great one.
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