2009-05-05

Renhai Reflections 103: Another Scoop


Another Scoop

A Renhai by John Daleiden (jd) & Vaughn Seward (vs)

An orange crane
lifts immense steel girders —
changing skyline. /jd

A piece of string in the beak — /vs
among tree buds, a new nest. /jd

Backyard sandbox —
the boy's backhoe lifts
another scoop. /vs

Click here for notes and linking details:
http://cflat7.drivehq.com/Renhai_0020.htm

[This was written with John Daleiden (US) a year ago and was originally published in the Sketchbook, the Journal for Eastern and Western Short Forms.]

10 comments:

Devika said...

Good series, Masago and John

'Another Scoop'- all the world seems a scoop to me, at times! :)

wishes,
devika

John McDonald said...

a good one
john

polona said...

another enjoyable renhai

RBroeker said...

Great idea: icecream or sensation for the media? Many layers in that - and excellent to read in a loud voice.

Best wishes
Ralf

Dalloway said...

a strong collaborative effort.

John, I was particularly struck by your first 3 lines... I have been trying to extend beyond natural topics... this is an excellent example

J. Andrew Lockhart said...

I like it! :)

Janice Thomson said...

What wonderful images each of these verses give. Most enjoyable read.

Pamela said...

2nd verse certainly timely -- the birds are sure busy around here.



***I always am interested in my word verifications and this one was "manduet"
appropriate give that your words harmonized beautifully on this "scoop"

Masago said...

Thank you all!

jem said...

I love the way the theme carries through these. The real, the natural and the play. Very strong images.