2008-11-11

Renhai Reflections 42: Twilight Trappings


Twilight Trappings

A Renhai by Janice Thomson (jt) and Vaughn Seward (vs)

Plumes of mist
rise from the river valley —
pre-dawn stillness. /vs

Pensive twilight clouds — /jt
a crow gazes east. /vs

Soft shadows —
a sand-crane collars
his last fish. /jt

Click here for notes and linking details:
http://cflat7.drivehq.com/Renhai_0090.htm

11 comments:

J. Andrew Lockhart said...

great work by both of you!

John McDonald said...

enjoyed this very much
john

polona said...

oh, i love this one... great work both of you

Every Photo Tells A Story said...

Bellissimo :)

Devika said...

Hi Masago,
Absolute poetry..really enjoyed this!

going to the link -- found me asking the meaning of "kigo"

haiku form and rhythm -- yet to get a full grab..i just fail with rhythm :-)

thank you!
wishes,
devika

Masago said...

Thank you all on behalf on Janice and me!

eptas: Grazie!

Devika: Kigo is a Japanese word. It means a seasonal reference... a word or phrase that sets the haiku in one of the seasons (Autumn, Winter, Spring, Summer). In this case 'mist' is considered a reference to Autumn. Seasonal references are very important in Japanese haiku and to a large extent in English haiku as well. With Renhai we prefer to see at least one of the three verses have a seasonal reference. Of course, if there is more than one reference, they should all be within the same season. And, it is possible to have a Renhai that is "All season" meaning that it has no specific seasonal reference and the Renhai could fit in every season. Thanks.

Devika said...

Thank you, Masago :-)

wishes!
devika

jem said...

Very gentle moments - I feel I should hold my breath to better appreciate them. Great choice of the word 'collars' in that last one!

(I like the new format for the notes too - no chance of accidentally seeing them before I want to!)

Janice Thomson said...

Yes, my thanks to everyone too!
Am a bit late here as I was knocked offline for most of the day. :)

Masago said...

Jem: Thank YOU (and glad you like the new archive format).

Pat Paulk said...

Y'all work together well.