2008-11-13
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About Masago
- Masago
- Edmonton, Alberta, Canada
- From "The Haiku Anthology" I became interested in Haiku and I have since written numerous haiku, senyru, and tanka. "Masago", my haiku pen-name, means "grain(s) of sand" in Japanese. I have recently started learning Esperanto and Japanese. A few years ago I developed a new eastern verse form which we now call 'Renhai'.
My Blog List
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Ice Can Look Nice4 years ago
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A Dream, A Prayer8 years ago
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6 Hantu yang Muncul di Toilet11 years ago
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distant thunder12 years ago
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welcome spring14 years ago
15 comments:
Suspense filled Renhai?!
seemingly pine needles falling from above on our thinning hair..is the climax!? :-)
the seedling on a cliff growing for ten years -- unbelievable..
the middle one in interesting, but i like the first one :-)
wishes!
devika
Hi,
The use of "tiny" and "clings", for me, places the author between the reader and what is being described - a feeling of attachment.
The final haiku feels too artful - an image imagined rather than observed.
I look forward to your next effort.
I just read the second comment..
makes sense and may be true --
perhaps as usual i was "imagining" if it happens on my head...:-)
wishes!
devika
very cold, but very nice :)
well done vaughn
john
Well done!
(I`m shivering!)
Cool.
feels cold but excellent work!
Crossing overhead –
Twilight trappings On the tip:
Quiet rhythms…
A couple of good ones!:)
Good one Vaughn. Lovely imagery.
to me, it is like you are finding these in a pensieve of my memories!
Thank you all!
Devika: "thinning hair"... Haha!
upinVermont: Thanks for visiting and your comments. I see what you mean about the image in the last verse. However, we live in an old neigbourhood (circa 1932) with many large evergreen trees all around. It is almost impossible to look out a window and not see a branch from on of them. When the first snow flakes of the season begin to fall I am inclined to look out the window and watch them land here and there including on the tips of pine tree branches.
Borut: Love it.
Pamela: No "real" magic at this end. :-) Thanks.
"On The Tip" has a real edginess to it. Rings very true this time of year.
Great - a strong sense of balance and fragility, and contrasts in colour between greens and whites. All wording feels very minimal and sparse, reflecting their scenes well.
Pat: So true (although down your way I imagine you don't see much of that, right?).
Jem: Thank you for your kind words.
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