2006-10-07

Several toys
emerge out of the snow...
spring thaw.

A butterfly on her nose
closes its coloured wings.

Through the clouds
the sun is sharp and clear -
cool on the eyes.

Dad attempts to whip up
a batch of scrambled eggs.

Autumn lawn...
more leaf mulching
than grass cutting.

The shuttle launch is delayed
because of too many vultures.

First snowfall...
here is a Christmas card
to be mailed, last year.

I lift the sheets and there
within, a little bed bug.

In her new
easy-bake oven she burns
a roast chicken.

This is a three-by-three interlocking renku I call a rubricku. The first stanza starts with Spring and then the poem works through all the seasons in order. The last stanza "easy-bake", is a central component of the poem that links to every other stanza. The season stanzas (hokku) are haiku I have previously written that have been chosen by various haiku on-line "publications", i.e.:

Spring (picked by Edward Weiss, wisteriapress.com):
Several toys
emerge out of the snow...
spring thaw.

Summer (picked by Sondra Ball, sondra.net/al/):
Through the clouds
the sun is sharp and clear -
cool on the eyes.

Autumn (picked by Susumu Takiguchi, World Haiku Showcase):
Autumn lawn
more leaf cutting
than grass cutting.

Winter (picked by Serge Tome, www.tempslibres.org/tl/en/cconv.html):
First snowfall...
here is a Christmas card
to be mailed, last year.

I have prepared a two dimensional representation of this rubricku showing the linkages between stanzas and other renku aspects:

http://members.shaw.ca/vseward/Masago_Rubricku_2007-10-07.pdf

Click the following for some further information about Rubricku including a template for writing your own:

http://haikuworkshop.pbwiki.com/

9 comments:

Anonymous said...

tap "next blog"
Masagoo-no-haiku
sand storm






(meaning... your haiku really blew me away. wow)

John McDonald said...

great stuff vaugh (loved the toys appearing)
john

Anonymous said...

very impressive!

floots said...

to a layman like me
it is simply a beautiful poem
well done

polona said...

wow! this is great, vaughn!

J. Andrew Lockhart said...

Thank you for explaining this! How interesting. I may try this, too. :)
p.s.- good collection of published work. :)

texas haijin said...

Vaughn,

I highley applaud you on not only a great work of art, but a beautiful presentation of Rubricku. I once created a solo linking formed called Reneal. I never messed with it after I created it. I hope you get some folks to try this form.

Thanks,
Dustin Neal

Pat Paulk said...

Like Floots, man a really good poem!!

Masago said...

Pamela: I am pleased you found and enjoyed the sand storm! :-)

John: Thank you.

Don: Thanks.

Floots: Thanks (does that make me clergy?). :-)

Polona: Thank you.

Andrew: I am glad you enjoyed this and that you are interested in trying to write one yourself. I have added some further information about Rubricku here:

Haikuworkshop Wiki

The "What is a Rubricku" page also contains a a template you can use to assist in writing it:

Rubricku Template

Dustin: Thank you for your kind words. I'd like to see your Reneal if you are able to make that available.

Pat: Thank you, my friend.