2007-09-15

Rengay Through the Seasons #2 [1-6] Summary

by Masago: Rengay 2, Verses 1-6 (of 6) Summary

Faint Thump

The faint thump / of a distant basketball — autumn evening.
Canola field horizon — a glint of setting sun.
That area / in Grandma's back yard — hint of mint.
A new bill / in change... the slight feel / of "Twenty Dollars".
In line to buy corn — I can almost taste it.
He knew before / the ball was even snapped — long bomb.

The first verse of this rengay was based on hearing a neighbour kid get in a few last moments of an autumn day. And an experience of summer that was soon going to end with the coming of winter.

The central theme is the notion of something barely perceptible. A second theme of senses came to me after writing the second verse. There are five senses and yet there are 6 verses in rengay. The idea of using the 6th sense, intuition, as the last sense in the series was suddenly obvious.

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8 comments:

J. Andrew Lockhart said...

This is getting more and more interesting.

floots said...

i agree
enjoyed the "talk-through" as well
thanks vaughn

Borut said...

I agree with Andrew and Floots!:)

aurora said...

Definitely more interesting. Enjoying this series immensely, Vaughn.

Masago said...

Thank you everyone for your support and warm comments.

Pamela said...

obviously a very creative thinker.

Bill said...

This one really works, Vaughn.

Masago said...

Bill, Pamela: Thanks for your warm comments.