by Masago: Rengay #33 (Apr 13-19, 2008), Verses 1-5 (of 6)
Foot traffic — a dandelion sprout / in a tiny crack.
These new shoes — my feet / sue for a prompt return.
Passing car — a bit of her dress caught / in the door.
A large man / squeezes in between us — long bus ride.
Plastic bottle of mustard — the supper silence broken.
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6 comments:
I'm having to think about this one -- thanks.
Mmmm this is a riddly one. I'm getting something about intrusions, welcome and otherwise perhaps.
I really love that dress one. I'm always quite excited when I see something caught in a car door, it feels like I'm seeing a glimpse of something I shouldnt. Although then I feel guilty as I know their clothes will be filthy when they reach their destination.
I like how this is the opposite to the last rengay series.
I almost heard that oozing sound of a squeezed mustard bottle :) Looks like everything is a bit squeezed in here :)
i can imagine a few comical scenes from this one :)
Andrew: :-)
jem: "Intrusions", that's very close! Such guilty little pleasures. :-)
Janice: I hadn't noticed that. Thanks.
Ričardas: Right on... although I was thinking more of when there is some air mixed with the oozing action. :-)
Polona: :-)
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