2008-11-01

Renhai Reflections 35: Sounding


Sounding

A Renhai by Trish Shields (ts)* & Vaughn Seward (vs)
Written October 22 to 29, 2008

A small crab / races across mudflats — autumn squall.
/ts
Honeymoon cruise ship stroll —
/vs a kiss on his red cheek. /ts
Its barnacled snout / breaks the calm surface — gushing blowhole.
/vs

*Trish lives on Vancouver Island, in British Colombia, Canada.

8 comments:

J. Andrew Lockhart said...

the 2 of you put this together so well!

Anonymous said...

with due apologies:

a small crab
trips on mudflats
broken shell?

Devika Jyothi said...

i begin to enjoy renhai more...even without the links given..

but then i may be missing something..so rules please, Masago...:-)

wishes!
devika

jem said...

Lovely seabased writing here.

I love the link between the kiss and the blowhole - or at least thats a link I draw. And that little crab, I want to follow him.

Borut said...

Sounding, yes! A lot of s's in it!:)

polona said...

great imagery in this one.
well done both!

Pamela said...

I wanted to give you some applause.. ****** hear it?

(:
I enjoyed this one so very much.

Masago said...

Thank you all very much, on behalf of Trish and me.

Gautami: Cute!

Devika: Hopefully today's post will help. :-)

Borut: Well-observed... I hadn't seen that (it certainly wasn't intentional).