2008-12-07

Renhai Reflections 53: Winter Romance


Winter Romance

A Renhai by Janice Thomson (jt) & Vaughn Seward (vs)

On the frigid lake
pushing a homemade iceboat
his eyes meet mine. /jt

Down the hill on cardboard, /vs
her foot entangles his. /jt

I meet the girl
from class while skating at
the frozen creek. /vs

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http://cflat7.drivehq.com/Renhai_0101.htm

[This is a spin-off of Renhai 100, see the notes for more information.]

12 comments:

Devika said...

Uh uh..Janice and Masago join for a romantic series..:)

a bit too cold...
But then the mood takes it off...

Nice series there...

wishes,
devika

J. Andrew Lockhart said...

another good one!

John McDonald said...

good one
john

Borut said...

A winter class...ic!:)

Bill said...

"I meet the girl" makes me a teen-ager again. Maybe this time I'll get a date.

polona said...

i really like how you tweaked it into something fresh :)

Pat Paulk said...

Any place to meet girls is OK with me!!

Pamela said...

playing tootsie in the 2nd verse?

Devika said...

Met the girl after class, M and J?

To me, she seem like looking to learn skating :))

came for a new one..will come later, Masago..

wishes,
devika

ps: Hope you don't mind me kidding :)

get zapped said...

These are so tender, they make me yearn to fall in love. Thank you both.

jem said...

Great to see these two side by side. To see how the bare bones remain but the atmosphere can totally change. Thanks for sharing the workings with us.

haiku-shelf said...

I enjoyed it very much to read "Winter Romance" -- the cold and ... so nice this contrast!