2009-06-02

Renhai Reflections 111: Us and Them


Us and Them

A Renhai by Vaughn Seward (vs) & Zhanna P. Rader (zh.r)

Bars all around —
on the bare, worn branches,
my family. /zh.r

The crowd grows larger — /vs
a redhead mimics me. /zh.r

I swing by tail...
one after another,
flashes of light. /vs

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10 comments:

Devika said...

'Us' not far behind 'them'...or, rather ahead of them! :)

enjoyable, Masago and Zhanna :)

wishes,
devika

Janice Thomson said...

I love that middle verse! Well done you two.

John McDonald said...

enjoyed
john

Gillena Cox said...

enjoyed this renhai the Li 1 of Verse 3 'i swing by tail' was a perfect clue for the theme


much love
gillena

Bill said...

Good one.

RBroeker said...

I like the entry very much: bar and bare ... Good one.

Best wishes
Ralf

J. Andrew Lockhart said...

very nice.

Masago said...

Thank you all!

jem said...

This feels quite sad to me.

When I read the first one, the image I got was of someone drawing their family tree, and having lots of 'bare branches' without names of relatives. No sure how I got that, but thought I'd share.

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