2006-07-30

731. Sad Scene

the little girl
behind the fence weeps...
why so sad?

7 comments:

Hototogisu said...

Vaughn, I like this haiku for three reasons: (1) simplicity of language; (2) simplicity of image; and (3) the compassion expressed in the last line. It just cuts straight to the chase. I can picture the little girl in my mind's eye as I type this comment. Thank you.

Pat Paulk said...

Vaughn, yes it could be very sad!!

Masago said...

karasu: Thank you. One may find numerous ways to interpret this poem. It was actually inspired by a childhood memory of a little girl on the other side of a fence...she was very sad and the image has stuck with me all these years.

pat: thanks for commenting.

its_baxter said...

great imagery. this reminds me of a picture i have of a little boy i know peeking through a fence. i suppose the fence holds a lot of mystery.

Masago said...

Thanks Baxter...with your memory, we could "mail/merge" this sad-girl poem into the following

the little boy
behind the fence gazes...
why so curious?

I'm sure this could be re-worked into something more polished.

polona said...

i can see that little girl... lovely!

Masago said...

Thanks polona.